Path: Cursed
Rank: Mischance
Reputation: 4
Mundane Skill(s): N/A
Magic Portfolio: N/A
)Magic Keywords: Void, Divination
Magic Abilities:

Quote:Whispers of the Hollow (cantrip)
Eloise taps into her connection to the Void and learns of what once was: moments, truths, or objects that have been destroyed, deleted, erased, or hidden. Peeling back the fragile layers of reality to uncover fragments of things that should no longer exist. She doesn’t just discover that something has been lost... she pulls it back from oblivion.

Hello! A few comments for Eloise. We're sure you had this in mind when you did the write up, but we do have to make sure to mention it. For any power using another characters backstory/memory/mind, you will have to confer closely with the player in question. We also have mind magic mechanics, so this is something to keep in mind, especially around the concept of taking another characters private memories, moments, truths, etc. You can read more about it on the magic archetypes page.

A quick comment on your flavour text on the curse, as well, but nothing that needs changing. The source of the curse can be involved in interdimensional realities and prophecy, but these are associated with Master Keywords in our system and are reserved for Arcanists. We're noting it just so you're aware of it.

The only thing that needs some adjusting is your cantrip. It should be a minor ability, something that takes little effort and has minimal impact. As the current cantrip is described, it has such an effect that we think it would fall into how we frame the keyword powers. Your divination power would be more appropriate for a cantrip, although you can modify it to make small insights more or less clear, and develop a keyword power with a more powerful divination effect that offers larger and more significant insights. This again brings up the issue of relying on your partner for any specifics if you're using it on another PC. It might be challenging to use in RP, which can be a good or a bad thing depending on your approach, but we leave it up to you to judge how to make it work in play.

Once you've adjusted the cantrip, tag @admin in #mod-request and we'll check it over again.