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Sarah Silvers - Arcanist - Sarah Silvers - 08-07-2022
Path: Arcanist
Rank: Thaumaturge
Reputation: 0
Mundane Skill(s): n/a
Magic Portfolio: (for Arcanist): Cthonic
Magic Keywords: Entropy, Empathy, Divination, Prescience
RE: Sarah Silvers - Arcanist - Indy - 08-07-2022
There's nothing to correct with the Keywords or abilities, and her charms look good! The concept is pretty exciting, but in that same vein, we miss more about Mim herself, her history and her journey to the current day. What got her into body-hopping? Does she know who her sisters are today? Etc. The want ad provides some of this context, which might be why you left it out, but people peeking in on apps won't have this context, so we want you to add it in.
You can also link the want ad somewhere in the app itself (maybe some spot in the history or at the end of?) if you really want to make it clear Mim is looking for her sisters.
RE: Sarah Silvers - Arcanist - Sarah Silvers - 08-07-2022
Fixed. Probably. >.>
Sarah Silvers - Arcanist - Sluggy - 08-10-2022