Hey Blois! We've discussed Cam some in the Discord, but he looks like he's shaping up into something more cohesive now, he's looking good. We do have some feedback though.
- Arcanists do not have Cantrips, please remove all mention of this power in the profile. Refer to the creation cheatsheet for a full overview of what you do and do not have as an Arcanist at the beginning.
- Enchanted items that impact the Strike & Cinder system need to be created through rituals, which goes through the moderation process. Remove the notes you have on the items referring to anything regarding Strike & Cinder, as any specifics are created through the ritual process. The items should go into your Inventory as well, as they are not relevant to the character's magical powers.
- Make sure that you've carefully read the Arcanist Path page and the Rituals page. Pay careful attention to the rituals, as that is the central aspect of being an Arcanist. Smiley faces do not fulfill the required steps for a ritual, so you will have to remove this and make sure you're listing only the relevant and current abilities he has access to.
- Remember that portfolios and keywords are in the meta, and the characters do not know they exist. Make sure you're keeping this in mind when framing Cam's focus in ritual magic.
- Readability and comprehension are key when writing collaboratively and for review. Keep in mind you have to strike a balance with writing out accents, overdoing it both reduces readability while risking making it comical when it isn't intended as such. We advise you revisit the accent you picked, and look up a glossary of Edinburgh colloquialisms and use that as a guide rather than phonetically spelling everything out.
As always, once you've addressed these points, tag us in the Discord and we'll re-check the character.
- Arcanists do not have Cantrips, please remove all mention of this power in the profile. Refer to the creation cheatsheet for a full overview of what you do and do not have as an Arcanist at the beginning.
- Enchanted items that impact the Strike & Cinder system need to be created through rituals, which goes through the moderation process. Remove the notes you have on the items referring to anything regarding Strike & Cinder, as any specifics are created through the ritual process. The items should go into your Inventory as well, as they are not relevant to the character's magical powers.
- Make sure that you've carefully read the Arcanist Path page and the Rituals page. Pay careful attention to the rituals, as that is the central aspect of being an Arcanist. Smiley faces do not fulfill the required steps for a ritual, so you will have to remove this and make sure you're listing only the relevant and current abilities he has access to.
- Remember that portfolios and keywords are in the meta, and the characters do not know they exist. Make sure you're keeping this in mind when framing Cam's focus in ritual magic.
- Readability and comprehension are key when writing collaboratively and for review. Keep in mind you have to strike a balance with writing out accents, overdoing it both reduces readability while risking making it comical when it isn't intended as such. We advise you revisit the accent you picked, and look up a glossary of Edinburgh colloquialisms and use that as a guide rather than phonetically spelling everything out.
As always, once you've addressed these points, tag us in the Discord and we'll re-check the character.