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Yuto Mochizuki - Half Blood


#1
Yuto Mochizuki Offline
Kirin Half-Blood
Aberrant
Path: Half-Blood
Rank: Aberrant (Novice)
Reputation: 0
Mundane Skill(s): 0
Magic Portfolio: n/a
Magic Keywords: 
Void
Mimicry
Illusion
Heightened Strength
#2
Indy Offline
Eldritch
Alright! Yuto looks great in concept, but there are some keyword quibbles to sort out. We'll get it all ironed out in no time.

The Lonely World power would only work with Void coupled with Mimicry or Illusion. We don't see Partitioning making sense for it. You should also emphasise how it imitates a pocket/parallel space rather than being a pocket/parallel space itself, as that falls under the "Space" Master-Legendary keyword. The Lonely World concept can be separate enough to exist without being seen and able to contain people and things, but not a genuine separate space.

The Heightened Strength keyword already has a defined frame, which overrules a player's self-defined descriptions for it, so keep that in mind. You can leave this blank on the power descriptions or use the definition provided.
Quote:Heightened Strength
You are able to lift a draft horse overhead with little effort.

The cantrip "Window to the Void" would more likely be something like void/illusion rather than void/partitioning. The "Contact from Beyond" cantrip will work with Teleport, as there's a modification coming to the Keyword in the next update that would make that interpretation work.

You've also listed your dice pools incorrectly. Make sure to use the "xD6" formatting where x is the number of dice in your pool.

Just tag us in #mod-request in Discord once you're finished! We're looking forward to seeing Yuto in play!
#3
Yuto Mochizuki Offline
Kirin Half-Blood
Aberrant
Okay. I think it's all fixed
#4
Indy Offline
Eldritch

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